When I was a kid I woke up because there were people screaming on the road. When I was about to go to the
kitchen to get a drink, I saw a guy sitting there with a bloody hand. I ran back to my mums' room because I got
scared of him. Later on, I found out that that guy has just shot someone. I told my mum and my grandfather
about what I just saw and my grandfather told us to stay in our room just in case the guy is dangerous. We were
in our room for about an hour until the police came and they told us to get out of our house because the guy
there is armed.
kitchen to get a drink, I saw a guy sitting there with a bloody hand. I ran back to my mums' room because I got
scared of him. Later on, I found out that that guy has just shot someone. I told my mum and my grandfather
about what I just saw and my grandfather told us to stay in our room just in case the guy is dangerous. We were
in our room for about an hour until the police came and they told us to get out of our house because the guy
there is armed.
Lots of action here, Loishane!
ReplyDeleteNext you can write about what your character is thinking/feeling.
Maybe even try a simile. "I felt like a.." "It felt as if..."
"The hand looked like..."
same
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